EDGAR ALLAN TOE (hellspoette) wrote in little_details,

  • Mood:

CARS... bloody cars...

It's true, it's true, I know nothing about cars. I wrote a story called Through Hollow Lands some time ago. Someone who read it told me I had my details wrong, when I talk about what's wrong with the main character's car (it gives him trouble throughout the course of story). I'd gotten my information off a website, which seemed legit enough, so I'm not sure what to think. At any rate, here is the paragraph in question (by me, Lara Unnerstall, do anything to it -- feathers, et all -- and I'll cut you)...

Dante’s unremarkable blue sedan was hiccoughing down the interstate. Steve Sweeney had tightened a battery cable (“this here Mister Dan-te is a loose cable, you gotta check these things reg-u-lirly”), and he’d been on his way, putting time and distance between himself and The House of Clocks. Manny, a scowling man with a long nose and curiously Eastern European accent, had given the car a jump-start two days later, at a gas station in western South Dakota. He warned Dante of early cable corrosion, and to beware of girls that dance at midnight on the highway, and to beware of long-haired women with green eyes, if he should pass by a river or lake. “They wvill wvant to be dancing wvith you, or for you to be brushing their hair,” he had said, dark eyes glittering. “That wvould be being a mistake.”

The idea was something along the lines of a loose cable connected to the battery causing the car to keep breaking down. Is that wrong? Does it not work that way? Does anyone have a better idea of something that could cause a car to keep stalling?

Recent Posts from This Community

  • Post a new comment


    default userpic
    When you submit the form an invisible reCAPTCHA check will be performed.
    You must follow the Privacy Policy and Google Terms of use.

Recent Posts from This Community