September 3rd, 2009

Weeping Angel

Strangulation! Effects with limited damage

Setting: late 19th century Portugal
Searched: various combinations of ligature + strangulation + signs + symptoms + hoarseness + recovery

The main character in question is a boy, around 11 or 12 years old. He's been strangled with a cord by a boy a few years older than him, though the strangulation attempt was interrupted before serious damage could be done.

I read that in most cases, the victim doesn't show significant signs of having been strangled, but I'd like it to be more obvious in this case. The problem is, I don't want to hurt him too badly. He is not going to receive any sort of medical treatment and has to 1) survive and 2) have no effects lasting into adulthood. (No permanent voice change, no brain damage, etc.)

I was thinking of going with petichiae, bruising on his neck, and having his voice be hoarse, but I'm not sure how plausible this is.
I'm particularly worried about the last part. I've read that a person's voice can be hoarse after strangulation, but I'm wondering if that only occurs with more serious damage and how long it lasts. I can't seem to find much of anything about recovering from hoarseness after strangulation; at the same time, I can't find anything that specifically says the hoarseness would be permanent, either. (My google-fu is weak.) If the hoarseness would be permanent or more dangerous than I'm looking for, I can drop that easily.

So, little_details, what do you think? Are my signs alright for this, or too much? Would hoarseness be permanent (or signify more serious damage)?
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Nightclub Rules in 1946 Chicago

My story is taking place in 1946, in Chicago, Illinois. It's in a nightclub, not too nice but not exactly slumming it.

The entire story takes place in the club, told from the point of view of the torch singer and an apprentice PI who is infatuated with her. She's massively popular and fills the club to capacity. I was writing along and said a line to the effect of "there were so many people standing just to watch her that some fire code or another must be in violation." Or something.

I know that this is prior to the hospital fire in Chicago so there weren't THAT many if any codes, but were there any rules about how many people could be in a business for safety or other reasons? Just a curiosity because I like the implication that she can draw in so many people but if not then I'll have to figure out another way of saying it.