March 28th, 2008

  • mzdany

swear words and gang-speech

Hello,I am hoping that the community members here would be able to help me improve the dialogue-flow in my story. The short summary is that the proprietor of a martial arts school in a Californian town is being accosted by members of a local gang trying to intimidate him into paying them protection money. The dialogue is between the gangsters, who are all Black, the Japanese proprietor of the school, and one of his employees, a Caucasian trainer. The gang members are very disrespectful and vulgar, and since I know next to nothing about gang-speech and racial slurs, I would really appreciate some help. What I am looking for mostly are racist taunts. What names would the thugs be calling the Japanese and Caucasian teachers? Also, what would the gang members be calling their extortion attempt in their own words? Thank you.
Due South

Chicago Factories in the 80's

I'm looking for a name for a specific company (or even a general industry) that would've been a significant source of manufacturing jobs in the Chicago area in the early 80's; preferably one that went belly-up (or moved overseas, or otherwise went bye-bye) in the 90's.  

What I have in mind is for a working-class character to apply for a job there (in the early 80's), thinking they'd be set for life, but a perceptive reader might realize that the job would no longer exist a decade or so later.  You know, situational irony.  I can make something up, but it would be cool to use a real factory if someone knows of one that would work. 

Edit:  Found, thnks!

U.S. Army courtesies: use of "sir" among officers

Setting: still World War II, still in the field, late 1944/early 1945, the Southwestern Pacific Command (Army, General MacArthur) (as opposed to Southern Pacific command of the Navy under Admiral Nimitz)

Searched: "military courtesy", "military courtesy officers", "sir officers equal rank"

In the U.S. Army, among officers of similar rank but with varying positions of seniority, what is the correct usage of "sir"? Particular instance in my story is: my character has just been given a battlefield commission and is reporting to his new CO in Company B. His CO invites him to join in an informal briefing with the battalion S-2.

All three are just promoted to their current positions after their regiment lost 400 men in a 40-day battle: my character from a platoon sergeant in Company C, the company CO from platoon leader in Company A, and the S-2 from platoon leader in the very Company B now in question. My character and the new S-2 knew each other relatively well considering being in different companies. The new CO is more of a stranger to my character.

They're all lieutenants. I'm sure the CO is a First Lieutenant, and I'm sure my character is a 2nd Lieutenant. Not sure about the S-2, but I'm assuming he's a First Lieutenant too.

Basic question I haven't quite picked up from repeated viewings of my favorite WW2 movies, among other things: where does "sir" come into their conversation?

It's a semi-casual conversation. My guy is still falling back on his noncom days and is not at all comfortable with being an officer. As a character point, he will be instinctively starting or ending any sentence to either man with "sir". Is there any propriety in him not saying "sir" to either of them during this conversation? Do the CO and the S-2 treat each other as equals? Any first names at all?


(edited to clarify relationships and how they got to where they are now.)

Courtroom Protocol

Damn me for loving criminal justice shows without having any actual knowledge of the criminal justice system outside of 'Don't break the law'....

So, I have a character (Lindsay Monroe from CSI: New York) who is testifying in a criminal trial. (For those of you familiar with the fandom, this is taking place during "Sleight Out of Hand".) She is dressed appropriately for the trial, but brought in a bag of clothes to change into afterwards. So my question is: where would she leave her personal belongings while testifying? Is there some sort of special waiting area for this, does it vary from courthouse to courthouse? I HAVE NO IDEA. I just don't think she would have been carrying it around with her because the bag needs to be big enough to fit a cowboy hat (LOLZ), so it's going to be kind of hefty, and not a little purse that she would carry with her. Could she even do that, or would she have to leave it out in the car?

Additional information that might be important: though Lindsay is a CSI, in this case she is testifying about a crime she witnessed when she was very young. She used to testify as an expert witness at this courthouse all the time, however, so there might be people still working there that she knows.

I've been in very few courtrooms and no lists I could find of courtroom protocol addressed this, so i don't really know how else to go about looking for something this random and specific.